The English Poetry Contest - June - Done

**BeeGee Kenobi** · The Lost Mod Verdiend: 0 Sikkels Woonplaats: Birmingham

I thought I might as well join in. I'm not a very big poetry writer, but I thought I'd give it a try. Some explenation might be useful. The poem is about a lonesome person who's only sense of self worth comes from the image in the mirror.

Mirror Dreams

Knowingly stuck in a hyper reality,
Knowingly bound to signs,
Losing signification,
Losing identification.
Fast.

Together alone,
Desiring more than this,
Knowing thereâ€™s no more,
Than this.

Only friends to trust,
Only enemies to see,
Fighting temptation,
Fighting desire for more.

Alone in the dark,
Stuck in a hyper reality,
Together alone.

Catie · 01-2004/31-12-2009

This poem is very personal, I wrote it a few minutes ago because I feel really bad because of how it's going in this home. The poem is about my older brother. He thinks the whole world is against him and he scares me really much. I'm hoping every day that it will change because I have the feeling that I AM te problem.

The word Mirrordreams means for me a dream that you hope for so much. and that it would be so much better in that other world, the world behind the mirror. The world behind the glass of reflection.

I don't really have a good explanation, sorry. I didn't used the word and I don't have a title (I don't want to call it Mirrordreams)

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I wished
That I wasnâ€™t here
I wished
That I was another person
Someone you would love

Frightening tears
Roll down my cheeks
Frightening eyes
Look upon you
Every day

A single look
To the glass of reflection
Is making me wish
That I would be someone else

I dream
Of a better place
For you
And for me

I feel so broken
But I will always hope
That the reflection of the glass
Isnâ€™t the reason for your anger

And I will always hope
That my dreams
Beyond this world
Will come true

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Sweet Hermione · Geplaatst: Wo Jun 20, 2007 10:38

Yes, my (very late) poem.
I chose the subject of this contest, actually. ''Mirrordreams'' is one of my favorite fantasybook. The word hasn't got a meaning in the book.
I really wanted to actually write a poem about the book, but it was really difficult for me.

So this morning, I just started to write. And this is it.
It's mainly about the end of the book. The female character just disappears, after she saved the (main) male character.
They had a very strong bound together, but they weren't in a relationship.
There are a lot of things of the book in the poem, like the woman who has suddenly very strong powers. And the last sentence is about the field/village where the man lives, ''Stormpunt.'' ''The Emptiness'' is the space of possiblilities in the dreamworld. The other sentences are mainly just moments and issues of the book.

Bathing in the Emptiness

Save me with your flying
boots
In Hermesâ€™s coat to tell
We survived some spinning time
To live happy after all

Create me with your striking
hands
The smashing door to with
Your power grew above
a man
Flight your Haven, live

She slept possible, a lot
Unchainted a living free
Answers boxed for curious
You wonâ€™t reply to me

Now make your path an ease
To find yourself some spot
Renna, tempting birdies
Iâ€™m still the storm you got

Rayatje · Volleerd Tovenaar Verdiend: 0 Sikkels

Hmm. It took me a while to write this poem, actually. But I like how it ended up. ^__^ It's about a girl who's searching for her Prince Charming. Her desire to find the right guy comes above in her dreams. This poem is one of her dreams. But I wrote it in the "I-form". : D Oh, and I rhymed. I usually rhyme, so why would this poem would be different? And by the way, Cotos: thanks for beta-reading. Very Happy

Mirrordream

Masquerades and laughing faces
Black and white in the most beautiful places
The desires of my heart find me in my sleep
Dangerous secrets there I keep

Dancing people, twinkling lights
Low deeps and unbelievable heights
I'm in a silver dress starring at the ground
Striking red lipstick on my mouth

Every girl was meant to be blessed with a boy
Some prince who doesn't treat your heart like a toy
On this ball, in this room, in this dream
People leaving this place, should I follow the stream?

No, I keep standing on my feet
Waiting for my prince charming to meet
I look around, the room is hollow
Sitting on the ground, I swallow

I hear a noise and look above
Feeling a great feeling of warm love
My eyes looking at a mirror and two looking back
And then everything just gets black

When I wake, I realize it
It was you I saw in the mirror
You are my mirror dream.

Caleb · Beginnend Tovenaar Verdiend: 0 Sikkels

Jikes! Sorry you guys, I didn't read the contest rules good enough. Just forget about this Poem and good luck everyone!

Hippogriefje · Geplaatst: Vr Jun 22, 2007 15:28

When I saw the word "Mirrordreams", I thought of a dream that was completely different then your own life. Well..Here's my poem! [It's not that long..But I thought it was finished with the last lines.]
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Mirrordream

I had a dream last night
It was about my life
But only a lot better,
'cause you were by my side.

Yes it showed a mirror,
of my life.
'Cause in the real world,
I'm lost without your love.

It's a mirrordream, and all I see is you.

**Jalf** · The Musical Mod Verdiend: 0 Sikkels Woonplaats: HPF

Okay... a shot from my side... When I read the word Mirrordreams I though of a world where everything is perfect... But you know it's not real.
This poem is about a girl who is deeply in love with her best friend. But this friend is gay, and therefor isn't intressed in her. The girl thinks about it, calls it stupid, but can't stop her love for him.

My poem doesn't have a title, it doesn't need one.

I'm walking in a broken land
A land of happiness
I want your arms around my waist
Let's call it crazyness

I'm walking in a broken land
A land of me and you
I want your hands upon my face
And it's a stupid thing to do

I'm walking in my mirrordreams
A dream of hurt and pain
I want your lips upon my lips

...

I guess I am insane...

child of the other side · Geplaatst: Za Jun 23, 2007 9:35

Okay folks, hold your cards and raise your bets for it is time to vote. But first a little reminder;

About the voting

And some extra rules that will (probably) only be valid this time; you have a third vote. This means that you must place 2 votes but can place 3 votes. Please do remember that you have to cast those two votes. If you only cast one it doesnâ€™t count. And you can vote between today and 30th of June.

How to vote;
My first/second/third vote goes to;
Because;

*****
And here are my three votes in alphabetical order.

My first vote goes to; Jalf.
Because; I really like the idea behind your poem, the subject that youâ€™ve chosen is different and it appeals me. Your poem also rhymes which is a big plus (for me because I like poems that rhyme.) Although it has only three stanzaâ€™s I donâ€™t think itâ€™s too short.

My second vote goes to; Smoky
Because; it attracts me. Maybe itâ€™s not the most difficult poem to read or understand but I love the concept. Itâ€™s easy, has short lines and I think itâ€™s nice to know that youâ€™ve described your own feelings.

My third vote goes to; T O N K S
Because; it rhymes, itâ€™s interesting and somehow it attracts me. There are words in your poem that are special/uncommon and some sentences are very strong. Although itâ€™s quite short, it is a complete story.

To everyone else; youâ€™ve all done a great job and although you didnâ€™t receive any of my votes I presume there are many more to come. I hadnâ€™t expected that the attendance would be so big so SH and I are both very pleased and looking forward to the results of this Contest.

Rayatje · Volleerd Tovenaar Verdiend: 0 Sikkels

Sorry voor de spellings- en opbouwfouten van mijn Engels.

My first vote goes to; Sofie.
Because; First of all: your poem rhymes. I like rhyming poems. You think totally different then me about mirrordreams (but I geuss everyone thinks of something else) and I like your describing of what you think when someone says mirrordream. Smile

My second vote goes to; Darren.
Because; Awh, your poem breaks my heart. It such a sensitive poem. They're much feelings in your poem. It's long and ofcourse it rhymes. <3

My third vote goes to; Sweet Hermione.
Because; I've never read the book but I love your poem. I like the way you make poems, I like your style. Your poem has strong words and it's just beautiful.

nirphania · Geplaatst: Za Jun 23, 2007 20:43

My first vote goes to krijt

The fact it is a conversation between two people is really appealing to me.
The repeating of the word mirror dreams is also very strong. I also liked the pieces what the man saw in the mirror.

My second vote goes to Rayatje

I liked the fact it was a bit story like, and a ball
The fact she didnâ€™t follow the stream makes her strong, and the ending is really romantic.

Sofie · Geplaatst: Zo Jun 24, 2007 22:02

My first vote goes to; Rayatje
Because; It's just pretty awesome. The rhyming is okay but it's totally not why I vote for this poem; it's just so.. I really recognize some parts of it, and it makes me feel all fuzzy and fairytale-like. It fascinates me and it's just the best for me.

Every girl was meant to be blessed with a boy
Some prince who doesn't treat your heart like a toy

This is pretty awesome.

Second vote goes to; Smoky
Because; It's just a very strong poem. It's quite short, but it doesn't need that many words to be special and strong. I do recognize it too. And I don't now, it just attracts me, lol. Pretty. Quite vague, too, has its own interpretation.

The mirror dreams,
of my messed up life.

That's very appealing. Because well, basically, many people's lifes are pretty messed up.

LavenderBrown · Geplaatst: Zo Jun 24, 2007 22:33

First of all @ Marlie & Plot: Awesome, an idea like this! Unfortunately the attempts of writing a poem contest-worthy with the idea of mirrordreams in it didn't go very well, so I didn't join in this poetry chaos, but I'll definitely give it another go at the next one (:

So here are my votes, and it was pretty hard to pick, because I pretty much loved all of them (hrr @ the 3-votes-thing).

My 1st vote goes to Avada Kedavra

Because:
Well, in the first place I vote for you because of the line "I remember the sun, the beach, even the ice cream.", because it reminds me of a sentence a Heroes-character said [a] But even though it's not the most abstract, the best written poem of the whole bunch, I just find it so sweet, and
anyone who can have feelings that intense - are they yours? - I think deserves a vote (:

My 2nd vote goes to child of the other side

Because:
"Only the blackness belongs to you" *drool*
I LOVE your vocabulary. I love your words and how you put them together and I think you do that in every poem, and this one is no different
from the others, so I think you should have a little recognition and stuff, and so my 2nd vote is for you because you're just a damn well
poetry-maker <3

My 3d vote goes to T O N K S

Because:
Well, your vision of mirrordreams and mine are way different, but I love your vocabulary, just like Marlie's, and your poem explained really well
how you feel about all this, and it's just really pretty. I particularly love this bit;
"Deep shock goes down the spinal cord.
All faces stare in smothered silence,
Prepared to face the prideful lord."
Gu-uh <3

Smoky · Geplaatst: Ma Jun 25, 2007 14:34

First of all, I want to say y'all did such a great job! I think it's awesome that so many people joined the contest!

My 1st vote goes to; Sofie
Because; There's a simple explanation why I'm voting for this poem. This was the only one that really gave me chills. Usually I'm more of a fan of vague, cryptic poems and this one's just so clear yet beautiful!
And I can find myself in it big time!

My 2nd vote goes to; Child of the other side
Because; Like I said before, I like cryptic poems. And this one is cryptic. It's so cryptic that it maybe confuses me a little. But that is what mirrordreams is to me, confusion. So to me, this poem is perfect!

Sweet Hermione · Geplaatst: Ma Jun 25, 2007 22:38

First vote: T O N K S
I like the subject of the poem, it appeals to me.
It's very beautiful written and you got a wonderful vocabulary.
It reminds me of one of my poems that I wrote some months ago, I guess. Sorry, I just think you rock.

Second vote: Child Of The Other Side
I always got a special feeling when I read your poems, they fascinate me and I think about then for a long time. This poem too.
I actually don't understand your poem fully, but it's so pretty.

T O N K S · Geplaatst: Di Jun 26, 2007 8:57

This was extremely difficult for me, because all of the poems are so great! Congratulations to all for your efforts!

But yes, it was so difficult that I even had to make up some strict conditions for myself:

- I don't like errors, so poems with errors were out straight away.
- I also want things to have a certain rythm. Now rythm doesn't mean rhyming, because not everything has to rhyme for me. Some sentences have to though.
- The meaning behind the poem.
- Of course the poem itself
- Vocabulary
- And last; originality.

In the end I choose three out of the five between which I was pending.

Vote 1 - Smoky
I just love your poem. It's short and strong, and the meaning was also a second thought of mine defining mirror dreams. I like your vocabulary very much in this poem (motions of sound, strangled my mind, magical mix) and I feel as if anyone can relate to this poem. It's just so abstract and wildly preceivable, but it's still personal because of the word 'my'. You did a great job.

Vote 2 - child of the other side

A very strong, but abstract poem. It gives me a rebellious sensation and it also appeals to me because I strongly feel that the world is fake and everything that is really going on is so well hidden. I don't know, but you kind of managed to describe the mind of the average human being on Earth. I love your vocab.

Vote 3 - Jalf

It's different, quite personal and again a very good definition of the word mirror dreams. I like the first sentence the most, it captures your attention straight away. It's fresh and short and many people in love think this way when they like someone that doesn't notice them. Very good.

And that's all folks. Everyone did a great job, too bad that I can only vote 3 times.