Loesewies Boterslag




I feel like commenting today, so prepare yourselves, 'cause this is gonna be long... xD

@ Sweet Hermione: (about 12:00) A very emotional one. The short stanzas make the poem seem very eeh... naked..I think that's the best word I can find to describe this poem. I think the person in this poem is hurting, because she hurt someone else..is this true? It's very good, very well done.
@ Cotos: (about Roof-topped houses) Very confronting, filled with anger. The sentences are so powerful, it made me feel sad. Also, I think the title is indeed v. v. good!
(about Crime watch) Again, very sad. This poem made me forget to breath, for it has something v. special. I recognise the situation of the poem, which is not that special an sich, but what is special, is that this poem describes exactly how I felt, being in that situation.. (I know it's not very well put, but it's true!). I can relate to this so much, it's scary. Kudos!
@ nirphania: (about Legend of the loch) I think it's a good story, but it feels like the poem isn't finished. It's like you wrote the beginning and the end, but forgot to write the middle part. I do like the "high road, low road" bit.
@ Sweet Hermione: (about Clarity) Great subtle rhyming in this one, very well put. I love how your poems are abstract, but not hard to understand. Kudos to this one!
@ Cotos: (about We all bleed a little) Don't dislike them! I absolutely adore this one. Somehow, the sentences about rain really appealed to me. It's like nature is crying for the ongoing destruction-and-resurrection-circle of the human being. V. good!
(about A moment's truth) A difficult one. To me, it's about  a very intense love, torn apart. The person in the poem is reflecting on the happy days of being together. Hmmm..don't know what else to say about this one. Oh, I love the rhythm of the poem, it flows so easily.
@ Sweet Hermione: (about the old poem without a title): I can feel the anxiety in this poem. Very well written!
@ Ailey: (about Still I feel regret) First of all, beautiful title! The poem is also very beautiful, so sad and to-the-point. I love the fourth stanza, "us being darkblue".. there's something about that part.
@ Cotos: (about Naïveté) This one is a little different from your previous poems. Less abstract, a little clearer. I like it, and I love the title.
@ Sweet Hermione: (about Sorry) I love the subject, very recognisable. The vocabulary in this one is great, though the sentences are a little hard to follow sometimes. Nevertheless, a good poem.
@ Cotos: (about Vanished thoughts) This one is a little weird. I don't know if I understand this one. Hmmm...I might get back to this one.

Oh right, @ Ailey: you asked me what inspires me to write my poems. Answer: everything. An event, something I see on the news, a book, a movie, a sentence I hear. Anything could inspire me to write a poem.

And @ Sweet Hermione: the wall-touching poem is about trying to find anwsers for everything, while some things are better not to understand. The "I can't write"-poem is about surviving the hard times I had in my live. The "Let's just go"-poem is a sweet cliché-poem about young love. The last poem is about being in a relationship which is consuming you, till you've reached a point of complete exhaustion.

And finally, some new poems:

Blue eyes crushing daylight
warm, cold
what's the difference?

I tried to warm your frozen hands with my last breaths
it didn't work
do you reckon it won't work for your heart either?

Oh, what the hell
warm, cold
there's no difference
as long as you keep smiling

don't you ever stop smiling


Kerewin

I've tried to write this poem
but every word I wrote turned into water
glided down the page
and dripped onto the floor

I had never seen my book cry before.

Love, Roos.


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