child of the other side




Come on folks, is it that difficult to vote? Unfortunately it’s too late now, therefore SH and I have voted in your place. 
If you don’t agree with this; please vote next time. (:


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My first vote goes to poem number 2

Although I’m not really fond of the first two stanza’s, the last stanza makes it up. The rhyme and rhythm are good, so is the flow. I like the words you’ve used, they are not ordinary, they sound special. And the subject attracts me as well. 

My second vote goes to poem number 5

A very close second, it was hard for me to choose. I liked your descriptions, especially these two lines It's morning, it’s broken and I'm crying out for gazing tramp, Soldiers between burning sheet. They sound very pretty ^^ and they make me think.
But I think you should have altered the first two lines of the last stanza. They seem, somehow, out of place.

My third vote goes to poem number 1

It’s a bit similar to poem number two (or vice versa) and yet it is so different. You use very short sentences but it fits with your style of poetry. I like the way you tell his story. It should be sad but somehow it makes me feel happy, like he’s not really dissatisfied  with who and where he is. Nice.


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